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specific grammar question list.
Posted: Mon Nov 14, 2011 9:23 pm
by juju96
Is this punctuated properly?
"This incident taught me two invaluable lessons: First, I realized my introductory courses in philosophy had somewhat less than sufficiently prepared me for disagreement with world-renowned philosophers. Secondly, and paramount, I was reminded that justice essentially guides the pursuit of a good life."
Re: specific grammar question list.
Posted: Mon Nov 14, 2011 9:24 pm
by ph14
juju96 wrote:Is this punctuated properly?
"This incident taught me two invaluable lessons: fFirst, I realized my introductory courses in philosophy had somewhat less than sufficiently prepared me for disagreement with world-renowned philosophers.; sSecond,ly, and paramount, I was reminded that justice essentially guides the pursuit of a good life."
Re: specific grammar question list.
Posted: Mon Nov 14, 2011 9:29 pm
by juju96
thanks ph14 seems right.
any one else concur? about to submit just want to be sure
Re: specific grammar question list.
Posted: Mon Nov 14, 2011 9:31 pm
by ph14
juju96 wrote:thanks ph14 seems right.
any one else concur? about to submit just want to be sure
Personally I would take out the first reason and focus on the second one, it's much more poignant.
Re: specific grammar question list.
Posted: Mon Nov 14, 2011 9:32 pm
by juju96
first was an attempt at a joke haha. not sure if it comes across that way
Re: specific grammar question list.
Posted: Mon Nov 14, 2011 9:32 pm
by ph14
juju96 wrote:first was an attempt at a joke haha. not sure if it comes across that way
It's hard to tell in writing. I didn't read it that way. I wouldn't want to risk it with the adcomms.
Edit: If you did want to keep it a joke, flip them around. "first, it made me realize that justice is at the root of the good life; second, and more important, [joke]." I still would keep it out though.
Re: specific grammar question list.
Posted: Mon Nov 14, 2011 9:38 pm
by juju96
thanks for the input!
Re: specific grammar question list.
Posted: Mon Nov 14, 2011 10:14 pm
by Renzo
ph14 wrote:juju96 wrote:thanks ph14 seems right.
any one else concur? about to submit just want to be sure
Personally I would take out the first reason and focus on the second one, it's much more poignant.
Nah, I'd keep it. Where you read poignant, I read melodrama. The humor of the first line helps temper the second.
Re: specific grammar question list.
Posted: Tue Nov 15, 2011 1:39 pm
by DocHawkeye
juju96 wrote:Is this punctuated properly?
"This incident taught me two invaluable lessons: First, I realized my introductory courses in philosophy had somewhat less than sufficiently prepared me for disagreement with world-renowned philosophers. Secondly, and paramount, I was reminded that justice essentially guides the pursuit of a good life."
Punctuation is the least of your problems.
Re: specific grammar question list.
Posted: Tue Nov 15, 2011 3:41 pm
by theadvancededit
juju96 wrote:Is this punctuated properly?
No.
"This incident taught me two invaluable lessons. First, I realized my introductory courses in philosophy had somewhat less than sufficiently prepared me for disagreement with world-renowned philosophers. Secondly, and more paramount importantly, I was reminded that justice essentially guides the pursuit of a good life."
It would also be helpful if you give this a bit more context.