In Mother Russia, Personal Statement Writes You Forum

[Trex]

Lol, sorry for the obnoxious title, I am just trying to get some more opinions...

Thank you all for swapping with me. I have read many critiques and have implemented many things that were suggested. My apologies for those people who I haven't gotten back to, but I was swamped. I am still willing to look over some more. For now, I am desperate for some help. I been working on the same PS for over 3 weeks and I can't stand it any longer. Help me please!

Please quote only via PM because I want to delete it after I'm done. Thank you so much!

^ This is the ending for my number one law school. It doesn't give a Why X option, is it overkill to say if admitted, I will attend?

[Trex]

Bump. I am really sick of writing this already, but the more I fix it, the worse it sounds (or so I feel). Anyone ever felt that way?

[CanadianWolf]

In my opinion, this is a very well done PS. You write in a clear, organized & convincing manner.

[Trex]

Thank you, I appreciate that.

[Kess]

Nice thread title.

Overall, I like this PS. It shows your character. Although, I would think of a better way of communicating to that school that it's your dream school. They might think you're telling every school that.

[Trex]

Does anyone think I should write "if admitted, i will attend"?