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Posted: Thu Nov 03, 2011 5:01 pm
by 06162014123
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Posted: Mon Nov 07, 2011 10:52 am
by 06162014123
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Re: First Attempt, it fizzles at the end
Posted: Mon Nov 07, 2011 11:12 am
by CanadianWolf
Your personal statement introduces you to the reader in a positive light. Genuine, sincere, caring, motivated & mature is the message which is shared in an effective fashion.
"...to what I view as the central pillar of the justice system." = is unclear.
P.S. Your essay starts out well, picks up steam & finishes on a high note.