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Would someone please be willing to give me feedback on this piece please? I just want to know whether I have the right idea.

I am willing to swap with someone and return the favor.

Thanks!

There are a bunch of incorrect comma usages in your essay. Also, the topic seems strange. You're describing how teaching was such a wonderful experience essay, so you're applying to law school. There's a jump in there in logic that is difficult to follow. It also seems disjointed, as if there's not really a centralized point.

Sorry if this sounds a bit harsh, but that's my two cents. Would be happy to offer my opinion if you have more specific questions about the essay, good luck!

Content has potential, but writing style needs a lot of work. Does not flow nicely. You will have to work hard on this one.

Thanks guys, I will go back to work on it. What about focusing more on the juggling act of full-time work and full-time school? Add a family into the mix, and I think I can show much about my determination and ability to do well with a slightly difficult situation?

I think I will re-write the majority of this.

Again, thanks.

Yeah, no problem. I would try to think about what makes me stand out from other applicants, and write an essay focused on that. A lot of people work and go to school. You can make it work, but you need to write it really well. There's an article on TLS that helped me a bit in forming my ideas, if you haven't seen it already: http://www.top-law-schools.com/statement.html