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Academic Statement - 2nd draft - any suggestions?

Post by salsahips » Sat Oct 08, 2011 6:29 pm

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Re: Academic Statement - 2nd draft - any suggestions?

Post by Mal Reynolds » Sat Oct 08, 2011 6:32 pm

The first sentence is improper. You can't use a semicolon to connect a list and another sentence. They have to be two independent clauses. That's as far as I got :)
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