Need Your Expert Opinion
Posted: Wed Oct 05, 2011 4:32 pm
Below is a copy of my personal statement. Please read it and let me know what you think. Thanks guys!
I was a political machine, spending all of my spare time attending campus events, rallying student supporters, and making hand written and verbal statements to key student groups. My political team consisted of fellow students from varying educational backgrounds and some that brought with them an endowment of student supporters. Campaigning became my extracurricular activity and outside of class and work it got all of my attention. Monday through Saturday I was lucky to get four hours of sleep. Coffee became more than just something to warm me up in the mornings, it became my fuel. The creamy latte from the campus coffee shop was quickly changed to a black Columbian blend with an energetic shot of espresso. All of these efforts were for one reason; to be elected President of the Student Government Association (SGA).
People may have construed my often red veined eyes as a result of sleepless nights and stress, but to me they were marks of determination. A week before the voting commenced SGA hosted the last televised debate of the election. Within a few minutes of debating my confidence level was heightened as my competitor wavered under the piercing crowed and heat stroking camera lights. I laid out my accomplishments which included; repealing a 13 year school mandate that kept many students from graduating within four years, growing campus environmental consciousness, voicing student expectations during the hiring committee meetings for the University’s new Head Master, and more. In addition, I continued to push my platform of lowering student activity fees, creating a better means of communication between the Financial Aid office and student body, and fostering a bond between the campus and neighboring businesses. After two days of voting the polls closed, and the SGA Advisor stood to announce the new SGA officers. I smiled because I was convinced my methods to win were as certain as death and taxes. My methods paid off in my campaigns for SGA Vice President of Academic Affairs and Homecoming King, so why not this? Thirty minutes later I was shaking the hand of the other guy.
All of the Columbian coffee, think tank meetings with peers, meticulous speech writing sessions, and moments of voter persuasion now felt like a waste of time and energy. I was not the Presidential victor, but I could not fathom letting all of my hard work and the supporters I was able to drum up go in vain. I took off work for a weekend and notified my friends and family that I was on a sabbatical from contact with the outside world. During that weekend I took time to relate my experience on the SGA campaign trail to my motivations and desires on campus and in my personal life. I asked myself “why was I running for President or putting efforts into being a public servant; what was I looking to accomplish?” From this question I gathered three conclusions; 1) I was determined to leave a lasting legacy, 2) I wanted to be the leader of a people who focused on making life better for others, and 3) I wanted to achieve heights that no member of my family had ever reached. At that moment I made a promise to myself that I will meet my goals, one step at a time and be the captain of my own destiny.
That summer going into my senior year I built a base of student and faculty supporters, called upon friends from universities such as; University of Georgia, Georgia Institute of Technology and Harvard Business School, and drafted a detailed constitution to start a new campus organization. Two months into the Fall semester I received an official charter establishing Black Student Union (BSU) as a new organization on my campus. As President of this new organization I pushed “Eight Pillars of Unity”: self cultural awareness, effective leadership, community service, scholarship, coalition building, social awareness, political awareness, and economic empowerment. By BSU’s second semester on campus it had risen as the premier organization for minorities on campus. Our number of active members had risen over 70% since the inception of the charter. The organization was off to an extraordinary start as we made presentations to grade school students about college enrollment opportunities, took over the planning and implementation for the University’s annual black history week celebration, became the leading voice for minorities on campus, and formed partnerships with other campus organizations. Upon graduation I had already made my recommendation to the BSU Board of who should succeed me. He was trained, eager, and motivated to continue where I left off. I utilized my organizational capacity, personal relations skills, and most of all my personal drive to build an organization that is fundamentally built to impact the lives of students long after my college days are done. Though I did not win my bid for President of SGA I was able to evaluate my motifs and successfully reach my underlying goals.
I was a political machine, spending all of my spare time attending campus events, rallying student supporters, and making hand written and verbal statements to key student groups. My political team consisted of fellow students from varying educational backgrounds and some that brought with them an endowment of student supporters. Campaigning became my extracurricular activity and outside of class and work it got all of my attention. Monday through Saturday I was lucky to get four hours of sleep. Coffee became more than just something to warm me up in the mornings, it became my fuel. The creamy latte from the campus coffee shop was quickly changed to a black Columbian blend with an energetic shot of espresso. All of these efforts were for one reason; to be elected President of the Student Government Association (SGA).
People may have construed my often red veined eyes as a result of sleepless nights and stress, but to me they were marks of determination. A week before the voting commenced SGA hosted the last televised debate of the election. Within a few minutes of debating my confidence level was heightened as my competitor wavered under the piercing crowed and heat stroking camera lights. I laid out my accomplishments which included; repealing a 13 year school mandate that kept many students from graduating within four years, growing campus environmental consciousness, voicing student expectations during the hiring committee meetings for the University’s new Head Master, and more. In addition, I continued to push my platform of lowering student activity fees, creating a better means of communication between the Financial Aid office and student body, and fostering a bond between the campus and neighboring businesses. After two days of voting the polls closed, and the SGA Advisor stood to announce the new SGA officers. I smiled because I was convinced my methods to win were as certain as death and taxes. My methods paid off in my campaigns for SGA Vice President of Academic Affairs and Homecoming King, so why not this? Thirty minutes later I was shaking the hand of the other guy.
All of the Columbian coffee, think tank meetings with peers, meticulous speech writing sessions, and moments of voter persuasion now felt like a waste of time and energy. I was not the Presidential victor, but I could not fathom letting all of my hard work and the supporters I was able to drum up go in vain. I took off work for a weekend and notified my friends and family that I was on a sabbatical from contact with the outside world. During that weekend I took time to relate my experience on the SGA campaign trail to my motivations and desires on campus and in my personal life. I asked myself “why was I running for President or putting efforts into being a public servant; what was I looking to accomplish?” From this question I gathered three conclusions; 1) I was determined to leave a lasting legacy, 2) I wanted to be the leader of a people who focused on making life better for others, and 3) I wanted to achieve heights that no member of my family had ever reached. At that moment I made a promise to myself that I will meet my goals, one step at a time and be the captain of my own destiny.
That summer going into my senior year I built a base of student and faculty supporters, called upon friends from universities such as; University of Georgia, Georgia Institute of Technology and Harvard Business School, and drafted a detailed constitution to start a new campus organization. Two months into the Fall semester I received an official charter establishing Black Student Union (BSU) as a new organization on my campus. As President of this new organization I pushed “Eight Pillars of Unity”: self cultural awareness, effective leadership, community service, scholarship, coalition building, social awareness, political awareness, and economic empowerment. By BSU’s second semester on campus it had risen as the premier organization for minorities on campus. Our number of active members had risen over 70% since the inception of the charter. The organization was off to an extraordinary start as we made presentations to grade school students about college enrollment opportunities, took over the planning and implementation for the University’s annual black history week celebration, became the leading voice for minorities on campus, and formed partnerships with other campus organizations. Upon graduation I had already made my recommendation to the BSU Board of who should succeed me. He was trained, eager, and motivated to continue where I left off. I utilized my organizational capacity, personal relations skills, and most of all my personal drive to build an organization that is fundamentally built to impact the lives of students long after my college days are done. Though I did not win my bid for President of SGA I was able to evaluate my motifs and successfully reach my underlying goals.