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personal doesn't mention law...do i need to tie it in?

Posted: Wed Aug 24, 2011 5:38 pm
by beta
..edit.

Re: personal doesn't mention law...do i need to tie it in?

Posted: Wed Aug 24, 2011 5:45 pm
by horrorbusiness
I don't get what positive traits of yours this is supposed to exposit.

Please never let any admissions committee see the paragraph that mentions frogger.

Serious question: Are you a guy or a girl? To me, this personal statement is slightly more likable/worthwhile if you're a girl.

Re: personal doesn't mention law...do i need to tie it in?

Posted: Wed Aug 24, 2011 5:47 pm
by beta
im a girl. its supposed to convey that i take challenges and push myself to even when im scared. from the rest of my application, u cant really tell that im atheletic or that ive taken risks. i wanted that to come through.

Re: personal doesn't mention law...do i need to tie it in?

Posted: Wed Aug 24, 2011 5:48 pm
by am060459
horrorbusiness wrote:I don't get what positive traits of yours this is supposed to exposit.

Please never let any admissions committee see the paragraph that mentions frogger.

Serious question: Are you a guy or a girl? To me, this personal statement is slightly more likable/worthwhile if you're a girl.
i concur with this (especially the last statement).

its definitely an interesting read tho.

Re: personal doesn't mention law...do i need to tie it in?

Posted: Wed Aug 24, 2011 5:51 pm
by beta
any suggestions for improvement? it was an accomplishment for me because i was super scared and because i taught myself.