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I'm just finishing up a rough draft of my personal statement as i intent to begin my applications this fall. I chose to write about a summer internship and i was wondering if anyone would be willing to provide some feedback? I'm worried that it is perhaps to much of a narrative and that i'm not effectively conveying what i want to (hard workers, responsible, organized etc)

I will swap you. PM me with your PS.

Thanks, anyone else willing to take a look?

I wouldn't mind, feel free to PM me with it

Thanks so much guys!