Top Law Schools

Thanks again.

bump

Your eight paragraph essay contains two paragraphs of material that have very little relevance to your quest for admission to law school. Bluntly speaking, this is more of a high school "what I did over the summer" essay than it is a personal statement for an intellectually demanding graduate school.

Seems as though you could turn the internship experience into a PS that demonstrated your skills and interpersonal abilities. I agree with CW that most of the PS here is irrelevant, hard to follow, and not material to the core of the PS. That's your back story -- don't need to include it, and if the only reason you volunteered is that you felt guilty about an offhand question posed a year earlier -- probably best not to mention it.

The beginning anecdote is too long. I'd delete it. I agree w/ Canadianwolf in that the PS did not have a professional feel. I think it's ok to stick w/ an international law topic, though. I'm against a PS appeasing the law school masses except when discussing a few "trendy" topics: international law (namely spanish), an African American breaking from tradition, and a LGBT story.

But if this is going to be your PS, make sure you don't send it to conservative schools. It's too risky.

Thanks for the great comments. And now, back to work.