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9th draft. Heading towards the finish line. Please critique!
Posted: Wed Jan 12, 2011 4:08 pm
by restless
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Re: 9th draft. Heading towards the finish line. Please critique!
Posted: Wed Jan 12, 2011 4:14 pm
by CanadianWolf
This essay is well done. Exhibits maturity, self-awareness & concern for others. One sentence strikes me as being a bit too harsh: "On the other side awaits a group of perjurers, drug addicts & frauds." This sentence suggests that you are still battling with strong emotions concerning your moral compass; it also conflicts with your noted growth & slowly developing compassion for others.
Re: 9th draft. Heading towards the finish line. Please critique!
Posted: Wed Jan 12, 2011 4:15 pm
by Upton Sinclair
Stop editing and send that shit in. It's getting really late in the cycle.
Sending apps asap > Perfect PS.
Re: 9th draft. Heading towards the finish line. Please critique!
Posted: Wed Jan 12, 2011 6:22 pm
by vttran9
Upton Sinclair wrote:Stop editing and send that shit in. It's getting really late in the cycle.
Sending apps asap > Perfect PS.