Critique my PS please Forum
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deltasigbn
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Critique my PS please
Thanks!
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LSATclincher
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Re: Critique my PS please
This didn't work. But I do agree on your theme, somewhat, of working hard to achieve your goals. And through your work, you learned to never take for granted your mental capacity.
This is the theme you stick to. But get rid of all the tiny details. You mentioned money way too much. Also, make sure you run this by someone w/ an English background before you submit since it looks like your from Canada.
Good luck.
This is the theme you stick to. But get rid of all the tiny details. You mentioned money way too much. Also, make sure you run this by someone w/ an English background before you submit since it looks like your from Canada.
Good luck.
