Help with one sentence in Why Michigan? Forum

[djeter2]

I am pretty sure I need to have a colon at the end of the below sentence, but I would like some confirmation. Thanks for your help!

I am particularly interested in participating in Michigan’s General Practice Clinic, which would allow me to work on a variety of legal cases, including those related to my special interest: landlord-tenant law.

[Tanicius]

A comma seems better.

[LSATclincher]

I would drop particularly because the position of that word and interested should be swapped. But then it would kinda conflict with the "in participating." As for the sentence. I'd break it up.

I am interested in participating in Michigan’s General Practice Clinic. The Clinic would provide an opportunity to work on a variety of legal cases, including those related to my special interest--landlord-tenant law.

The dash after "interest" is the preferred method here. Word will edit the dash once you type it in. It gives a streamlined look.

[RockinJosh]

I would drop particularly because the position of that word and interested should be swapped. But then it would kinda conflict with the "in participating." As for the sentence. I'd break it up.

I am interested in participating in Michigan’s General Practice Clinic. The Clinic would provide an opportunity to work on a variety of legal cases, including those related to my special interest--landlord-tenant law.

The dash after "interest" is the preferred method here. Word will edit the dash once you type it in. It gives a streamlined look.

I actually like the colon. The long dash, or "em dash" usually is used (imho) to show a break in thought... something like "I never thought I'd do it--until I did"

In this case, you seem less like you are breaking the thought and more like you are adding some description, and so I think the colon is fine, in my opinion. Though I don't think either is seriously wrong or would raise any eyebrows.

[09042014]

"I couldn't get into Penn, and I don't own any pink shirts."

[arism87]

I would drop particularly because the position of that word and interested should be swapped. But then it would kinda conflict with the "in participating." As for the sentence. I'd break it up.

I am interested in participating in Michigan’s General Practice Clinic. The Clinic would provide an opportunity to work on a variety of legal cases, including those related to my special interest--landlord-tenant law.

The dash after "interest" is the preferred method here. Word will edit the dash once you type it in. It gives a streamlined look.

I like this rewrite, but prefer it with the colon.

[AreJay711]

I would drop particularly because the position of that word and interested should be swapped. But then it would kinda conflict with the "in participating." As for the sentence. I'd break it up.

I am interested in participating in Michigan’s General Practice Clinic. The Clinic would provide an opportunity to work on a variety of legal cases, including those related to my special interest--landlord-tenant law.

The dash after "interest" is the preferred method here. Word will edit the dash once you type it in. It gives a streamlined look.

I actually like the colon. The long dash, or "em dash" usually is used (imho) to show a break in thought... something like "I never thought I'd do it--until I did"

In this case, you seem less like you are breaking the thought and more like you are adding some description, and so I think the colon is fine, in my opinion. Though I don't think either is seriously wrong or would raise any eyebrows.

A dash would work grammatically but go ahead and put the colon because it is considered more formal.