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Hi everyone. Here are the 2 sentences:

"With all the experience and knowledge that I have gained, I am now confident that I can succeed in a demanding career, as my enthusiasm for environmental law constantly grows. As a science student, I have solid scientific knowledge in many fields and I have excelled in my comparative physiology course which focused on global environmental problems. "

I will appreciate early reply. Thanks!

binarycode wrote:Hi everyone. Here are the 2 sentences:

"With all the experience and knowledge that I have gained, I am now confident that I can succeed in a demanding career, as my enthusiasm for environmental law constantly grows. As a science student, I have solid scientific knowledge in many fields and I have excelled in my comparative physiology course which focused on global environmental problems. "

I will appreciate early reply. Thanks!

As my enthusiasm for environmental law continues to grow, my information and experiences in the area of environmental science have grown in kind. Additionally, my experience as an X major at Y has left me confident that I can succeed in a career practicing environmental law.

s0ph1e2007 wrote:

binarycode wrote:Hi everyone. Here are the 2 sentences:

"With all the experience and knowledge that I have gained, I am now confident that I can succeed in a demanding career, as my enthusiasm for environmental law constantly grows. As a science student, I have solid scientific knowledge in many fields and I have excelled in my comparative physiology course which focused on global environmental problems. "

I will appreciate early reply. Thanks!

As my enthusiasm for environmental law continues to grow, my information and experiences in the area of environmental science have grown in kind. Additionally, my experience as an X major at Y has left me confident that I can succeed in a career practicing environmental law.

This is good. I would change "my information" to "my knowledge" though. If you keep your original then you need a comma after fields because both sides of the conjunction are complete sentences.

Thank you s0ph1e2007 for the correction. It sounds more professional now. And thank you WayBryson for confirmation.

I look forward to hearing more suggestions, if any.

Not sure of your intended meaning without more information regarding your "experience", but consider:

Experience and knowledge gained from studying science and global environmental issues has created confident enthusiasm for pursuing a career in environmental law.

Or:

My confident enthusiasm for pursuing a career in environmental law arose from my study of science involving global environmental issues.

CanadianWolf wrote:Not sure of your intended meaning without more information regarding your "experience", but consider:

Experience and knowledge gained from studying science and global environmental issues has created confident enthusiasm for pursuing a career in environmental law.

Or:

My confident enthusiasm for pursuing a career in environmental law arose from my study of science involving global environmental issues.

Thanks for the edit. I don't have very much experience (as far as real-world work experience goes) but I have taken a lot of undergrad ecology and physiology courses that relate to environmental law. I have done substantial research about the topic as well. So I think the second version of your edit describes me better.

The "experience" I referred to was regarding the adversity that I had to overcome in order to graduate. However, I have trouble fitting it nicely into my personal statement.