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Here's the second draft of my statement. I personall

Your transition from P3 to P4 is in invisible ink/font ? Fix that.

What you want to say is that: when you reached college and applied yourself to an academic approach to study, research, and taking a position you realized that it created a better foundation to stand on, grow from, and refer to.<----Say that.

That message (which is reasonable) is totally lost in your self-depracating vomit stories and anxiety. I would not do that.

Accentuate the positive! You can say the anxiety and nervous stomach stuff in one sentence, and then drive home the good stuff! Trust me, we all get the sad stuff, no need to stretch it out.

Stick with the power of an academic approach to issues and thoughts, the support of diligent research, and the appreciation of varying points of view. Your PS will thank you.

You can do it.

I edited it to try and accommodate your suggestions. Anything that might be considered a sob story has been condensed into one paragraph. I think. If I would do better to eliminate most of the high school stuff, let me know.