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Confucianism DS..bad?
Posted: Fri Nov 26, 2010 4:41 am
by atkpl
it's a first draft..
I tried to show Confucianism is not a religion.
Besides all the grammar errors and awkward wordings, do you guys think the content itself is ok??
I am applying to Fordham, do you think adcomm at Fordham will hate this content?
I really appreciate your time reading it.
Re: Confucianism DS..bad?
Posted: Sat Nov 27, 2010 2:42 am
by sophia.olive
better.
Needs to be a little more clear.
Re: Confucianism DS..bad?
Posted: Sat Nov 27, 2010 3:40 am
by Saltqjibo
This is way better than your last DS, you will need to get someone with strong grammer / editing skills to go over it before you hand it in though.
Re: Confucianism DS..bad?
Posted: Sat Nov 27, 2010 3:49 am
by You Gotta Have Faith
Saltqjibo wrote:This is way better than your last DS, you will need to get someone with strong grammer / editing skills to go over it before you hand it in though.
hehehe, I'm sorry... I had to...
But it's in good spirit, I promise.
Re: Confucianism DS..bad?
Posted: Sat Nov 27, 2010 4:00 am
by sophia.olive
Saltqjibo wrote:This is way better than your last DS, you will need to get someone with strong grammers / editing skills to go over it before you hand it in though.
Re: Confucianism DS..bad?
Posted: Sat Nov 27, 2010 4:22 am
by Saltqjibo
That's why I didn't try to help him
