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PS (4th Draft) Advice/Criticism please! Ready to send?

Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 10:46 pm
by fannntastic
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Re: Personal Statement (3rd Draft) Advice/Criticism please!

Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 10:57 pm
by CanadianWolf
This will work. Public interest law, however, is much broader than your narrowly refined definition. Your personal statement may raise concerns as to whether or not you are in therapy--which should be viewed as a positive--or, if not, why not ?

Re: Personal Statement (3rd Draft) Advice/Criticism please!

Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 11:26 pm
by doglover24
i agree with the commenter above that your definition of public interest is quite narrow. Maybe "for me, public interest is about..."
also, sorry to nitpick but i would say CUNY Law School prides itself in etc and put that whole sentence in singular.

Re: PS (3rd Draft Revised) Advice/Criticism please!

Posted: Fri Nov 12, 2010 1:03 pm
by fannntastic
thanks. i revised it a little bit. hope its a little better.