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				Final Draft - Diversity Statement - Your input is needed.
				Posted: Wed Nov 10, 2010 11:27 pm
				by sankara
				Thanks.
			 
			
					
				Re: Final Draft - Diversity Statement - Your input is needed.
				Posted: Wed Nov 10, 2010 11:47 pm
				by plenipotentiary
				This is damn good. Sorry about your friend. 
Some quibbles: You use the word "youth" a whole lot, so maybe try to switch it up a little. 
This sentence is a little confusing/too long:" Episodes of laughter that have coalesced with the tears to mold me into a unique law school applicant with a desire to utilize his law degree to prevent a future generation from meeting [Q's] fate."
			 
			
					
				Re: Final Draft - Diversity Statement - Your input is needed.
				Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 1:11 am
				by sankara
				Thanks.