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Posted: Wed Nov 03, 2010 4:53 pm
by Steveserna25
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Re: Critique my Personal Statement please!!!
Posted: Wed Nov 03, 2010 6:19 pm
by Steveserna25
I don't need you guys to go by it line by line. I would just like to know if the theme/ structure is good enough. I know I have to tidy it up a bit grammatically, really i just want to know if you guys approve of the approach. Thanks again.
Re: Critique my Personal Statement please!!!
Posted: Wed Nov 03, 2010 7:23 pm
by bigwillie
One small piece of advice: you switch tenses a few times. Try to stick to one tense and it will sound much better.