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Can someone help me out, I feel that something is wrong with this sentence in my conclusion but cant put my finger on it:

"I hope to someday play a pivotal role enacting international treaties between the U.S and Mexico."


If it needs work, what specifically? Your help is much appreciated!

"I desire to attain a pivotal role enacting international treaties between the U.S and Mexico. Improving the ecological and human well-being in the border region will..."

HTH

alrighty thanks for your help! do you see any way i could keep it as one sentence though? my PS has been cut and cut and cut for about two months now and Im right at two pages (another sentence is gonna put me over)

In that case, I would just tweak it so that it doesn't sound so run-on. Simple/concise sentences always allow one to end strong.

does anyone else have any suggestions on making this sentence work?