Submitting something like this on Nov. 1st Forum

[TJISMYHERO]

Thanks ahead of time! With all the personal statements on TLS right now I bet half of you are already reading like adcoms.

[sophielia]

-The description of the car accident and the paragraph concerning how you had to make a choice can both be made more concise.
-The fact that you were up late studying all the time might lead them to believe that you are a procrastinator who just crams hard at the last minute.
-Give an example of how you were a leader in the classroom.
-Change "While I haven’t by any means made up my mind" into something that makes you sound flexible and willing to learn rather than uncertain.

[TJISMYHERO]

Thanks for the good advice!