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Grammar experts: I need your wisdom!
Posted: Tue Oct 26, 2010 4:27 pm
by Steppinchoi
I'm trying to figure out the correct phrasing of this sentence:
"this particular client, my fourth of this day in my internship..."
Or
"this particular client, my fourth of the day in my internship..."
Or
"this particular client, my fourth of that day in my internship..."
I feel like option 2 makes it sound like the internship was only 1 day long...
Edit: I think I figured something out after some sentence restructuring. Thanks all!
Re: Grammar experts: I need your wisdom!
Posted: Tue Oct 26, 2010 4:28 pm
by CanadianWolf
"my fourth client that day of my internship" ?
Re: Grammar experts: I need your wisdom!
Posted: Tue Oct 26, 2010 4:28 pm
by PinkCow
You might be able to find a better way to phrase that, but of the choices, 2.
Re: Grammar experts: I need your wisdom!
Posted: Tue Oct 26, 2010 4:29 pm
by Steppinchoi
CanadianWolf wrote:"my fourth client this day" ?
Doesn't really work in my context... I would really like to keep the "this particular client..." part
Re: Grammar experts: I need your wisdom!
Posted: Tue Oct 26, 2010 4:30 pm
by bk1
Show the context and there will likely be a much better way to craft this.
Re: Grammar experts: I need your wisdom!
Posted: Tue Oct 26, 2010 4:33 pm
by Steppinchoi
bk187 wrote:Show the context and there will likely be a much better way to craft this.
Basically it goes:
"We were in the xxxx room in xxxxx (building). This particular client, my fourth of ____ day, was to be instructed on ..."
However, i introduce this person in the previous paragraph so I can't really just say "my fourth client of the day..."
Re: Grammar experts: I need your wisdom!
Posted: Tue Oct 26, 2010 5:50 pm
by sarahh
I vote for "the day". However, I wonder if you need it at all. Does it matter that the client was the fourth of the day?