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Revamped PS - Second Draft - Please Offer Input!

Posted: Mon Oct 25, 2010 11:04 pm
by ATR
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Re: Revamped PS - Second Draft - Please Offer Input!

Posted: Mon Oct 25, 2010 11:23 pm
by Sandro
I like your writing style. I'm going to steal it. It doesnt have "I want to go to law school because XXXX" at the end of beginning so I like that part too.

Re: Revamped PS - Second Draft - Please Offer Input!

Posted: Mon Oct 25, 2010 11:40 pm
by ATR
Sandro777 wrote:I like your writing style. I'm going to steal it. It doesnt have "I want to go to law school because XXXX" at the end of beginning so I like that part too.
Thanks, I appreciate the compliments.

Re: Revamped PS - Second Draft - Please Offer Input!

Posted: Tue Oct 26, 2010 12:36 am
by Sandro
Do you have any tips for translating things that occurred at work into something that isnt boring as hell to read?

Re: Revamped PS - Second Draft - Please Offer Input!

Posted: Tue Oct 26, 2010 12:45 am
by ATR
Sandro777 wrote:Do you have any tips for translating things that occurred at work into something that isnt boring as hell to read?
Well, this was my third try at a statement. I concentrated using active verbs, being descriptive (but not overly so), and adding my own personal thoughts to break the monotony of excessive story-telling. Just keep working at it. I'd also suggest going to your school's writing center, if you're enrolled. It really helped me.

Re: Revamped PS - Second Draft - Please Offer Input!

Posted: Tue Oct 26, 2010 3:15 pm
by ATR
Bumping... I would appreciate any input; I'm hoping to start sending off applications in the next week.