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Posted: Sat Oct 23, 2010 8:43 am
by eliekedourie
Thanks, but no thanks.

Re: PS. Comments appreciated

Posted: Sat Oct 23, 2010 10:01 am
by AP-375
While reading, it was unclear how long your worked in that position. It also took me some time to figure out what role the video played. You mention the video, but I have to go mid way into the next paragraph before I can make a strong inference of which side the video proved. I would clearly state the role of the video when you mention it. Just my .2

Re: WE PS. Looking for feedback.

Posted: Sat Oct 23, 2010 6:43 pm
by eliekedourie
Bump. Any comments would be greatly appreciated. Also, feel free to PM me with your statements and I'll be happy to look them over. Hoping to get this ready by the 29th, so keep the comments coming.

Re: WE PS. Looking for feedback.

Posted: Sun Oct 24, 2010 1:21 pm
by eliekedourie
One last desperate bump.