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i could really use some help from anyone

This is waaaaaay too general. You never explain what you mean by "help people." It sounds immature and unfocused. Also, please remove "really" in the last sentence; too informal. This seems to be the flow you describe: "feel bad -> go visit family who have it worse -> realize "helping people" is good -> feel bad -> go visit family who have it worse -> realize "helping people" is good -> realize going to law school is good for "helping people." Sorry to be harsh, but this does not deliver the level of introspection that a personal statement should, nor does it demonstrate a mastery of language or rhetoric.

its alright not harsh at all..yea i pretty much threw that together quickly and just wanted to see where i was in terms of just making sure i was on the right path..i wasnt planning on that being my final copy by any means but i guess i still have plenty of work to do on it lol