please read mine and critique it--i will love you forever!
Posted: Fri Oct 15, 2010 4:03 pm
by ck3ku
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Re: please read mine and critique it--i will love you forever!
Posted: Fri Oct 15, 2010 4:09 pm
by CanadianWolf
This is a very moving & convincing essay that should make a very positive impact upon the reader. Maybe I need to reread your personal statement, but the Holocaust survivor references don't really make the impact or connection that you intend.