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PLEASE critique. Very first draft.
Posted: Tue Oct 12, 2010 3:02 pm
by MRsimon
EDIT:Revising
Re: PLEASE critique. Very first draft.
Posted: Tue Oct 12, 2010 3:05 pm
by bk1
I stopped reading halfway through the first paragraph and I still hadn't heard anything about you at that point. This is a personal statement, not your random musings on life.
Re: PLEASE critique. Very first draft.
Posted: Tue Oct 12, 2010 3:06 pm
by MRsimon
Read it over. Agreed. Thank you sir