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Which of these sounds better? Or do neither make sense...

Furthermore, as it was my curiosity combined with my unfamiliarity with the type of programming that fueled the work ethic and resolve that led to my successful project, I believe my strong interest in IP law and my non-traditional background will come together to have a similar impact on my career as a law student.

Furthermore, as it was my curiosity combined with my unfamiliarity with the type of programming that led to my successful project, I believe my strong interest in IP law and my non-traditional background will come together to fuel a strong work ethic and determination during my career as a law student.

the latter sounds better

The skills that led to my successful project will also serve me well in law school. My strong interest in intellectual property law, along with my non-traditional background, will result in a profound work ethic and unbridled determination during my time in law school.

But i'd keep working on it -- both your originals seem awkward and don't make much sense (maybe because I haven't read the rest of your essay).

Both terrible; second one better.

Knockglock wrote:The skills that led to my successful project will also serve me well in law school. My strong interest in intellectual property law, along with my non-traditional background, will result in a profound work ethic and unbridled determination during my time in law school.

And this one fits right in. Equally terrible.

Pablo Ramirez wrote:

Knockglock wrote:The skills that led to my successful project will also serve me well in law school. My strong interest in intellectual property law, along with my non-traditional background, will result in a profound work ethic and unbridled determination during my time in law school.

And this one fits right in. Equally terrible.

do not use this word

saltoftheearth wrote:

Pablo Ramirez wrote:

Knockglock wrote:The skills that led to my successful project will also serve me well in law school. My strong interest in intellectual property law, along with my non-traditional background, will result in a profound work ethic and unbridled determination during my time in law school.

And this one fits right in. Equally terrible.

do not use this word

Lol, don't use my sentence -- I was just trying to play around with it and see if I could make it better.

Haha, I'm just going to go with:

I, like, worked hard and shit. I'll do it again if you want.

For the sake of brevity:

My work ethic and resolve led to a successful project; these, together with my strong interest in IP law and my non-traditional background, will lead to success in law school.

mdallavis wrote:For the sake of brevity:

My work ethic and resolve led to a successful project; these, together with my strong interest in IP law and my non-traditional background, will lead to success in law school.

Close, but not so dry. Here:

Just as my curiosity with the programming drove me to succeed with my project, so too will my interest in intellectual property and my non-traditional background enable my success as a law student.

2ofspades wrote:

mdallavis wrote:For the sake of brevity:

My work ethic and resolve led to a successful project; these, together with my strong interest in IP law and my non-traditional background, will lead to success in law school.

Close, but not so dry. Here:

Just as my curiosity with the programming drove me to succeed with my project, so too will my interest in intellectual property and my non-traditional background enable my success as a law student.

I like this one.

Knockglock wrote:

2ofspades wrote:

mdallavis wrote:For the sake of brevity:

My work ethic and resolve led to a successful project; these, together with my strong interest in IP law and my non-traditional background, will lead to success in law school.

Close, but not so dry. Here:

Just as my curiosity with the programming drove me to succeed with my project, so too will my interest in intellectual property and my non-traditional background enable my success as a law student.

I like this one.

I agree. I just love semicolons.

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Marionberry wrote:"I grinds like a muhfucka."

OP should of course find a way to work this sentence into his PS as well.