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Very first draft! Hobby/passion essay...
Posted: Sat Aug 21, 2010 8:54 pm
by piccolittle
Back to the drawing board...
Re: Very first draft! Hobby/passion essay...
Posted: Sat Aug 21, 2010 9:20 pm
by NonTradHealthLaw
Your punctuation errors disallowed me from progressing beyond the 2nd paragraph. Possible potential, but needs a lot of editing.
Re: Very first draft! Hobby/passion essay...
Posted: Sat Aug 21, 2010 10:02 pm
by piccolittle
NonTradHealthLaw wrote:Your punctuation errors disallowed me from progressing beyond the 2nd paragraph. Possible potential, but needs a lot of editing.
Ouch. Punctuation errors... as in comma overuse?
Re: Very first draft! Hobby/passion essay...
Posted: Sat Aug 21, 2010 10:13 pm
by NonTradHealthLaw
Actually, underuse and misuse. And, I lied. I made it, initially, to approximately halfway through the third paragraph before punctuation stopped me from progressing. Now I've read through the rest and it reminds me of my mother's romance novels-melodramatic and overwrought. Sorry to have such a violent reaction against your essay, OP, but this one rubbed me the wrong way throughout.