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PS Critique appreciated
Posted: Fri Jan 29, 2010 6:24 pm
by Chaupoline
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Re: PS Critique appreciated
Posted: Fri Jan 29, 2010 10:10 pm
by Irrelephant
check your pm
Re: PS Critique appreciated
Posted: Sat Jan 30, 2010 3:14 am
by Dr. Review
It may just be me, but this PS feels a bit rigid. To me, this sounds more like "What it was like to be stationed in Kuwait" rather than "Why I want to attend law school, particularly at your school"
Again, that may just be a matter of opinion.
Re: PS Critique appreciated
Posted: Sat Jan 30, 2010 3:42 am
by bees
Yuck. Nothing happens in the whole thing. You were in the Navy - I'm sure something happened to you that changed you/made you a better person (that wasn't rearranging bunks).
Choose one interesting experience and focus on that.
Re: PS Critique appreciated
Posted: Mon Feb 01, 2010 2:44 pm
by Chaupoline
Thank you for the replies.