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I want to avoid the idea that my desire to go to Law School is purely for vindication.



As I walked into the rest room I could hear them laughing in the next room. As I hurried to wash my hands 9 men whom I didn’t know but have had the pleasure of getting to know my wife and I entered. The laughter stopped as soon as they saw me. My heart began beating rapidly. I can’t believe all this is happening, I said to my self. As I exited the restroom I saw Margarita. Like the 9 men, Margarita too had a chance to get to know my wife and I over the past two weeks. She looked through the glass door and turned around to see me behind her. I said nothing. She gave me a smile that made me feel confident but somewhat scared at the same time. I announced to the room that a verdict had been reached. Forty Five minutes after closing arguments the verdict was in. All parties reentered the court room. Standing at the Defense table I grasped Laura’s hand. The bailiff handed the Judge the verdict. The Judge announced that the verdicts were the same and that nobody was to display any negative outpouring of emotion. I looked at Laura wondering if this was the last time I would ever see my beautiful wife. “Not Guilty”. After a two years of having an accusations hanging over our heads we were free. Now what do we do? I though to my self once again.

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I appreciate the info. I will certainly make use of your advice.

I actually announced to the defense team and support we had there that the verdicat was in. I just knew it.

I don't want to sound like "that guy" that's going to show everybody. I had a plan to pursue law when I separated from the Army and now that this arduous situation is past I'm simply picking up where I left off.

i don't really know what's going on.

"As I hurried to wash my hands 9 men whom I didn’t know but have had the pleasure of getting to know my wife and I entered." this sentence in particular is weird.

twert wrote:i don't really know what's going on.

"As I hurried to wash my hands 9 men whom I didn’t know but have had the pleasure of getting to know my wife and I entered." this sentence in particular is weird.

Thanks to SDWaterBaby this is the correction to that sentence.

As I hurried to wash my hands, 9 men entered. While I did not know these men on a personal level, we were no strangers; these men had spent the past two weeks getting to know my wife and me.

the number 9 should be spelled out. Nine instead of 9.

cad424 wrote:

twert wrote:i don't really know what's going on.

"As I hurried to wash my hands 9 men whom I didn’t know but have had the pleasure of getting to know my wife and I entered." this sentence in particular is weird.

Thanks to SDWaterBaby this is the correction to that sentence.

As I hurried to wash my hands, 9 men entered. While I did not know these men on a personal level, we were no strangers; these men had spent the past two weeks getting to know my wife and me.

My wife and I

My wife and me. Better yet, me and my wife.

grobbelski wrote:

cad424 wrote:

twert wrote:i don't really know what's going on.

"As I hurried to wash my hands 9 men whom I didn’t know but have had the pleasure of getting to know my wife and I entered." this sentence in particular is weird.

Thanks to SDWaterBaby this is the correction to that sentence.

As I hurried to wash my hands, 9 men entered. While I did not know these men on a personal level, we were no strangers; these men had spent the past two weeks getting to know my wife and me.

My wife and I

my wife and i hasn't been correct for a few hundred years now.

If it is the subject it is "my wife and I" and if it is the object, which it is in this case, it is "me".

The whole "getting to know" thing just sounds a little cryptic. And the fact that "getting to know" is followed by "my wife" makes it sort of sound like you mean "know" in the Biblical sense. And the whole 9 men thing.

Maybe "learning about" is better. I'm not trying to be funny.

Standing at the Defense table[,] I grasped Laura’s hand. The bailiff handed the Judge the verdict. The Judge announced that the verdicts were the same and that nobody was to display any negative outpouring of emotion. I looked at Laura [and wondered] if this was the last time I would ever see my beautiful wife.
“Not Guilty”.
After a two years of having an accusations hanging over our heads we were free. Now what do we do? I though to my self once again.

Assuming that this PS is about you being accused of something you didn't do, I would suggest for you to scrap everything above this paragraph. You threw around too many names and people and made it sound like it was the middle of the story rather than the beginning.

I feel like the Not Guilty part should be separate from everything else. Gives it greater impact.

cad424 wrote:I want to avoid the idea that my desire to go to Law School is purely for vindication.



As I walked into the rest room I could hear them laughing in the next room. As I hurried to wash my hands 9 men whom I didn’t know but have had the pleasure of getting to know my wife and I entered. The laughter stopped as soon as they saw me. My heart began beating rapidly. I can’t believe all this is happening, I said to my self. As I exited the restroom I saw Margarita. Like the 9 men, Margarita too had a chance to get to know my wife and I over the past two weeks. She looked through the glass door and turned around to see me behind her. I said nothing. She gave me a smile that made me feel confident but somewhat scared at the same time. I announced to the room that a verdict had been reached. Forty Five minutes after closing arguments the verdict was in. All parties reentered the court room. Standing at the Defense table I grasped Laura’s hand. The bailiff handed the Judge the verdict. The Judge announced that the verdicts were the same and that nobody was to display any negative outpouring of emotion. I looked at Laura wondering if this was the last time I would ever see my beautiful wife. “Not Guilty”. After a two years of having an accusations hanging over our heads we were free. Now what do we do? I though to my self once again.

Yeah this 9 guys getting to know your wife sentence is really weird.

I thought you were setting the scene for some kind of gang rape honestly. And I agree with Cherryalamode.

quickquestionthanks wrote:The whole "getting to know" thing just sounds a little cryptic. And the fact that "getting to know" is followed by "my wife" makes it sort of sound like you mean "know" in the Biblical sense. And the whole 9 men thing.

Maybe "learning about" is better. I'm not trying to be funny.

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I thought the same thing upon first reading.

quickquestionthanks wrote:The whole "getting to know" thing just sounds a little cryptic. And the fact that "getting to know" is followed by "my wife" makes it sort of sound like you mean "know" in the Biblical sense. And the whole 9 men thing.

Maybe "learning about" is better. I'm not trying to be funny.

+1

sirchristaylor wrote:

quickquestionthanks wrote:The whole "getting to know" thing just sounds a little cryptic. And the fact that "getting to know" is followed by "my wife" makes it sort of sound like you mean "know" in the Biblical sense. And the whole 9 men thing.

Maybe "learning about" is better. I'm not trying to be funny.

+1

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