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Final draft, submitting tonight! Any comments will help!
Posted: Wed Jan 13, 2010 12:15 am
by silas84
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Re: Final draft, submitting tonight! Any comments will help!
Posted: Wed Jan 13, 2010 1:35 am
by athena
Great work!.. I would not put many of the details in the third paragraph though. I see that's why you delayed to apply to law school.
But since you want to submit it today, it's alright.
Re: Final draft, submitting tonight! Any comments will help!
Posted: Wed Jan 13, 2010 4:32 am
by silas84
athena wrote:Great work!.. I would not put many of the details in the third paragraph though. I see that's why you delayed to apply to law school.
But since you want to submit it today, it's alright.
Edit: Thanks. I was debating on what to do with the third paragraph. Actually, this current one is a somewhat less dramatic version.
Re: Final draft, submitting tonight! Any comments will help!
Posted: Wed Jan 13, 2010 10:42 am
by silas84
Bump
Re: Final draft, submitting tonight! Any comments will help!
Posted: Wed Jan 13, 2010 5:15 pm
by athena
Cut it short and add it to the second paragraph..i dont see anything else wrong with unless you have prood read it a hundred times....