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I think you can keep the same overall feel, but conclude with something stronger about how you are now independent and although we all have influences, you have matured enough to make the decision on your own. Obviously no one is totally independent of their outside influences, but reading this made me wonder if you could even make your own decisions. No offense- I just tried to read it in the most critical way that an ad com might.

No offense taken, I think you're on to something there and I'll use that for sure.

I like the part about you branching on your own- perhaps expand on and conclude with that?

Hmm..I m the youngest..i became independent..my dad is lawyer..hmm..i dont see any convincing reason to why law school would be a good investment of time in this story..I think you should focus more on how the program and remove all these factors about being the youngest....Good luck

athena wrote:Hmm..I m the youngest..i became independent..my dad is lawyer..hmm..i dont see any convincing reason to why law school would be a good investment of time in this story..I think you should focus more on how the program and remove all these factors about being the youngest....Good luck

This. The PS is your opportunity to really tell the adcomms about yourself, as if you had the opportunity for an actual interview. While the personal statement you have posted is well written and surely demonstrates some of the reasons that set you apart as an applicant, it spends too much time on people other than you. Your siblings, your father. In an interview, the interviewer wants to know about YOU. Condense the rest of your PS and expand on why it makes you who you are and how it has enabled you to have the desire/ability to succeed in law school/the legal field.