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only one typo that I could spot, you left out "the" right before the word pastor in the 3rd paragraph.

overall very good, best of luck

very compelling... "my time spent in my old neighborhood" should be "the time I spent in my old neighborhood"

one of the best PS I have read on TLS.

Really good stuff man. Good read. Now, I'm not an English major (i.e. I'm not sure if these are right or wrong), but here are a few things I saw that may be wrong? I dunno... ha. You tell me.

Those whom I believed were my friends, wanted me to engage in horrendous activities, but I could never do it.

Comma needed?


I’m not sure how to explain it but my time spent that summer had enlightened me for the better. I told one of pastors at my church about my situation and he simply put it like this “you knew a world of innocence, when you were blind; now you fear a world of terror and have opened your eyes.”

Should there be a colon or something? It seems to not flow.

I agree with all the replies thus far. I will def be making those corrections later on. Any other comments? Would appreciate some last minute criticism.