Writing a LOCI, need a grammar help on one sentence.

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heyman86us
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Writing a LOCI, need a grammar help on one sentence.

Postby heyman86us » Tue Dec 25, 2012 6:38 pm

Hi,

I am currently writing a LOCI. And, I need a grammar help on one sentence.

"I would certainly attend XYZ Law, which is my number one choice, if were I granted admission."
"I would certainly attend XYZ Law, which is my number one choice, if I were granted admission."
"I will certainly attend XYZ Law, which is my number one choice, if XYZ Law grants admission."

Which sentence is grammartically correct? If none of them are right, please tell me how would you write this sentence.
I would appreciate any help.

Thank you,

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laxbrah420
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Re: Writing a LOCI, need a grammar help on one sentence.

Postby laxbrah420 » Tue Dec 25, 2012 6:47 pm

If admitted, I will certainly attend xyz; it is my number one choice

Of course, i think this makes you sound kind of weak and vulnerable. I would say, "You should admit my ass because I am the motherfucking best."
If you disagree though, perhaps up the ante and say, "I would do anything to attend your prestigious institution. I beg of you to admit me. I would forever be in your gratitude."
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Re: Writing a LOCI, need a grammar help on one sentence.

Postby soj » Tue Dec 25, 2012 7:21 pm

heyman86us wrote:"I will certainly attend XYZ Law, which is my number one choice, if XYZ Law grants admission."


or

laxbrah420 wrote:If admitted, I will certainly attend xyz; it is my number one choice

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Re: Writing a LOCI, need a grammar help on one sentence.

Postby B90 » Tue Dec 25, 2012 7:45 pm

Though it frightens me, I agree with laxbrah. Also was option #1, where you used the phrase "were I" a legit consideration?

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laxbrah420
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Re: Writing a LOCI, need a grammar help on one sentence.

Postby laxbrah420 » Tue Dec 25, 2012 7:51 pm

B90 wrote:Though it frightens me, I agree with laxbrah. Also was option #1, where you used the phrase "were I" a legit consideration?

I'm going to start saying "if were I..." a lot.

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Re: Writing a LOCI, need a grammar help on one sentence.

Postby banjo » Tue Dec 25, 2012 10:54 pm

I would certainly blah blah, which blah blah, should I be granted admission.


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