Is this sentence grammatically correct? Why X?

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Is this sentence grammatically correct? Why X?

Postby JJDancer » Sun Dec 05, 2010 5:36 pm

XYZ School of Law is my top choice not only for professional but also personal reasons.

Thanks

One more thing: collegiate atmosphere or collegial atmosphere?
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Re: Is this sentence grammatically correct? Why X?

Postby gbpackerbacker » Sun Dec 05, 2010 5:38 pm

I'd throw a comma in there....

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Re: Is this sentence grammatically correct? Why X?

Postby dakatz » Sun Dec 05, 2010 5:41 pm

Why not just make it more clear by saying "XYZ is my top choice for both professional and personal reasons".

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Re: Is this sentence grammatically correct? Why X?

Postby JJDancer » Sun Dec 05, 2010 5:43 pm

dakatz wrote:Why not just make it more clear by saying "XYZ is my top choice for both professional and personal reasons".

I spent the previous two paragraphs on professional reasons and am going to talk about the personal ones in this paragraph. So would that still be ok?

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Re: Is this sentence grammatically correct? Why X?

Postby dakatz » Sun Dec 05, 2010 5:44 pm

JJDancer wrote:
dakatz wrote:Why not just make it more clear by saying "XYZ is my top choice for both professional and personal reasons".

I spent the previous two paragraphs on professional reasons and am going to talk about the personal ones in this paragraph. So would that still be ok?


Then just say "XYZ law is also my top choice for personal reasons as well"

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Re: Is this sentence grammatically correct? Why X?

Postby dakatz » Sun Dec 05, 2010 5:45 pm

But if you wanted to go with the "not only" thing, I'd say "XYZ law is my top choice not only for professional reasons, but personal ones as well."

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Re: Is this sentence grammatically correct? Why X?

Postby JJDancer » Sun Dec 05, 2010 5:48 pm

Thanks to both of you.

One more thing: collegiate atmosphere or collegial atmosphere?

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Re: Is this sentence grammatically correct? Why X?

Postby ahduth » Sun Dec 05, 2010 5:54 pm

Probably collegial, but we kinda need some context.

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Re: Is this sentence grammatically correct? Why X?

Postby alphagamma » Sun Dec 05, 2010 7:20 pm

JJDancer wrote:Thanks to both of you.

One more thing: collegiate atmosphere or collegial atmosphere?

According to Merriam-Webster, both mean the same general thing. However, if you want to be more exact:

Collegial = teamwork, camaraderie, fellowship, etc.

Collegiate = college-related.

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Re: Is this sentence grammatically correct? Why X?

Postby glewz » Sun Dec 05, 2010 7:27 pm

Collegial is the word you're looking for. Collegiate provides no descriptive value in the current context (of a why x letter).


XYZ School of Law is my top choice FOR not only professional COMMA but also personal reasons.

"for" should be before "not only," and there needs to be a comma before "but"


If you put "for" after "not only," then you need to say "not only for professional reasons, but also for personal ones."

As is, the sentence is grammatically incorrect due to its lack of parallelism.

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Re: Is this sentence grammatically correct? Why X?

Postby RTFM » Sun Dec 05, 2010 9:34 pm

XYZ School of Law is my top choice not only for professional reasons, but also for personal reasons.

The other suggestions are grammatically correct, but sound awkward IMO.




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