I'm the first person from my family to even apply to graduate school. I wasn't accepted to any schools, but in some sort of freak occurrence, I was wait listed at my top choice.
I already sent them a brief message, saying that i would like to remain on the wait list.
I attended a recent campus tour and got some information about the school that I really liked. Now I'm writing them a final LOCI, talking about my visit and expressing how it's the school for me.
Please give it a read, and don't be afraid to tear it up. As long as the bashing is constructive... bring it on...
I am writing you today to convey my strong continuing interest in attending XX XX School of Law. I would like to thank you for giving my application serious consideration, and for evaluating my qualifications carefully. XX XX remains my number one choice, and I would withdraw all other applications, if offered a seat.
I was originally drawn to your school because of high praise from practicing lawyers whom I know personally. My recent visit heavily reinforced my notion that XX XX is the right place for me.
When picking a school, I searched for a place that harbored comradery between students but also offered a dose of friendly competition. XX XX, I had heard, was a place that provided such an environment and my visit last week confirmed this, as the tour guide brought the Student Mentor Program to my attention. Mentorship is something I have come to appreciate heavily in my many years of youth guidance through community service. It truly sounded like a program that I would thoroughly utilize while attending and something to which I could add significant value when I approach graduation.
As the tour continued, I was impressed by the immense amount of resources the school provides for its students. The most interesting resource however, was the Law Career Services office. After speaking to a member of the staff, and hearing the level of honest commitment to placing graduates in appropriate jobs; it was confirmed in my mind, that XX XX genuinely cares about its student body and that it’s the place for me.
If possible, I would also like some input on: How to close the letter, if i should mention that the tour guide was really great, and if i should say that I really like the campus. Also I said "place for me" twice... what else could i say?
Thanks for your help, i really appreciate it.