Thanks for all the help!!!

Bump.

It's mangoes, not mangos.

This PS baffles me. You go on vacation to Jamaica, climb a tree, get inspired by poverty? What does that have to do with the rest of it?

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Bump for Saturday. Don't be afraid to comment, I only need a few more opinions! Remember I will gladly swap PS or DS, whichever you prefer.

Is this your DS or PS?

Thoughts:

-I enjoyed the mango opening.
-Though, this situation, in the context that you're telling the story, comes off as a tad contrived. It just seems, at least in my experience, that most kids in mentorship type program are naturally resistant and/or suspicious.
- In the first paragraph you talk about how this mango experience helped you take the first step in defining who you are today--so, I was looking for something on a much larger scale, I wasn't sold on this story with Jim.