Can you rate my "Why NYU" essay?

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Can you rate my "Why NYU" essay?

Postby Anonymous User » Wed Aug 24, 2016 2:07 am

Please let me know if there's anything I should remove or include:
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Re: Can you rate my "Why NYU" essay?

Postby Anonymous User » Wed Aug 24, 2016 2:08 am

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Re: Can you rate my "Why NYU" essay?

Postby cavalier1138 » Wed Aug 24, 2016 6:23 am

The sentence about the faculty comes off as unforgivably kiss-ass (as does a good chunk of the first paragraph). If you're going to talk about faculty, then pick one or two teachers who are doing work you're interested in. Talk about a research project/book/article that gets you excited to work with them. Don't just call them "preeminent legal minds" and then slide on to how great the dean is.

Your "Why [X]" statement should always be about why the school is a good fit for you and your goals. The admissions department already knows that they're a good school. They don't need you to reinforce the generic points from their website.

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Re: Can you rate my "Why NYU" essay?

Postby Alive97 » Wed Aug 24, 2016 11:00 am

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Re: Can you rate my "Why NYU" essay?

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