Splitter PS: Upward Trend in GPA

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Splitter PS: Upward Trend in GPA

Postby SandorClegane » Mon Aug 08, 2016 11:59 am

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Re: Splitter PS: Upward Trend in GPA

Postby lymenheimer » Mon Aug 08, 2016 12:02 pm

SandorClegane wrote:Professor X’s class

You should be using your powers for something greater than law school.

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Re: Splitter PS: Upward Trend in GPA

Postby SandorClegane » Mon Aug 08, 2016 12:03 pm

lymenheimer wrote:
SandorClegane wrote:Professor X’s class

You should be using your powers for something greater than law school.

That made me laugh. Thank you. Do you have advice?

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Re: Splitter PS: Upward Trend in GPA

Postby lymenheimer » Mon Aug 08, 2016 12:23 pm

SandorClegane wrote:
lymenheimer wrote:
SandorClegane wrote:Professor X’s class

You should be using your powers for something greater than law school.

That made me laugh. Thank you. Do you have advice?

Yea but it will vary depending upon your abilities... :lol:

"this essay would tell a very different story"
I think it is very inauthentic when people call their PS an "essay" (and that could just be the connotation coming from having to write "essays" in school). "This story would have a different ending" or something sounds a bit better. That way it doesn't sound like an obligation or a piece you just drafted for the school. This is a story about your life, not just an essay.

It seems to be a quality piece, though. A lot better than lots of people offer here at the outset. I'd be comfortable submitting something like this.

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Re: Splitter PS: Upward Trend in GPA

Postby SandorClegane » Mon Aug 08, 2016 12:39 pm

lymenheimer wrote:
SandorClegane wrote:
lymenheimer wrote:
SandorClegane wrote:Professor X’s class

You should be using your powers for something greater than law school.

That made me laugh. Thank you. Do you have advice?

Yea but it will vary depending upon your abilities... :lol:

"this essay would tell a very different story"
I think it is very inauthentic when people call their PS an "essay" (and that could just be the connotation coming from having to write "essays" in school). "This story would have a different ending" or something sounds a bit better. That way it doesn't sound like an obligation or a piece you just drafted for the school. This is a story about your life, not just an essay.

It seems to be a quality piece, though. A lot better than lots of people offer here at the outset. I'd be comfortable submitting something like this.

Thank you! I will find a way to replace the word "essay". Any other thoughts? Is it okay if this turns out being 2.5 pages, size 11, double spaced?

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Re: Splitter PS: Upward Trend in GPA

Postby lymenheimer » Mon Aug 08, 2016 12:40 pm

SandorClegane wrote:Thank you! I will find a way to replace the word "essay". Any other thoughts? Is it okay if this turns out being 2.5 pages, size 11, double spaced?


Depends on the requirements of the school. Some allow for more than 2 pages, some don't specify, and some require 2 pages max. You'll be able to find some areas to cut language, though. I was at the same length and cut it to 2 pages without eliminating main content/message.



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