benwyatt wrote:Please don't actually say this because it doesn't make any sense considering the definition of destiny. I know this seems pedantic, but I'm covering my bases here.
As for the rest of the structure, it could work or it could be generic and boring, depends on how you write it. I can't comment further on a basic outline.
why do you think they're not well-suited to this purpose? how are you constraining your topic? i wrote about something personal and traumatic that in no way connected to the law but i used it to demonstrate important qualities about myself that I thought were important to helping an admissions officer see me completely.
this doesn't necessarily have to be limited only to topics you think are appropriate dinner conversation.
I do think the structure you just laid out could work, it's just too little to definitely judge.
I think you're wrong on this point. I'm not in admissions nor have I ever been, but your resume doesn't communicate the full complexities of your life since high school/college and the notion that you didn't experience a single thing worth writing about since high school is laughable to me.
Awesome, thanks for responding! Here are my thoughts:
1. It's probably just my ego, but I really enjoy that phrase. I had a friend look at my PS though, and they thought it was a weak thesis, so I'm considering removing it entirely.
2. Structure; as of right now, the essay isn't well connected. It reads as "here are 3x I've dealt with adversity." So, even if I stick with this format, I have my work cut out for me.
3. Since the weight loss, the moments that have defined me (or at least the ones I can immediately think of) are the dissolution of my fraternity because of the death of a close friend, studying in Paris for a semester (reeks of privilege to me), and lessons from my work experiences about what I want to do with my life (I guess). Honestly, studying for the LSAT for the past year has been a pretty big experience for me, and really made me grow up; having to balance that with work after having a relatively easy collegiate career did change me.
The reason why I like the weight loss story is because it explains how an attitude I use for my life initially developed. I never said that I have nothing to write about since high school, but it's an important story in my personal history that explain a lot about me.
Edit - I'm also an amateur bodybuilder....perhaps I can tie the weight loss in with that, and write about setting goals, etc.?