PS First Draft - Help Please! Forum

[mintme]

Thanks

[lymenheimer]

Please don't quote.

You use passive voice which takes up some space otherwise better used. I think it reads better as a diversity statement than a PS, but still would need heavy editing. There's not much insight into your personality or even you as a person. It seems to focus more on your enviornment. Without quoting you...If you want to advocate for all of those things, why not become a social worker? Get your MSW or something. I'm not sure that, as written, it explains a quality reason for you wanting to become a lawyer or even what you can offer to the law school environment other than your time-management skills. Essentially, it seems that many individuals with divorced parents could have written this (because many are in low-income families). I am not sure that it singles you out in a way that you want it to.