my PS draft...need help Forum
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hannahv246
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my PS draft...need help
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Last edited by hannahv246 on Fri Aug 21, 2015 8:10 am, edited 1 time in total.
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CanadianWolf
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Re: my PS draft...need help
After a very quick read:
"patience", not "patients"
The second sentence of the fourth paragraph needs work. Probably best to just delete this sentence.
The final paragraph needs to be condensed.
"patience", not "patients"
The second sentence of the fourth paragraph needs work. Probably best to just delete this sentence.
The final paragraph needs to be condensed.
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Scalvert
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Re: my PS draft...need help
Hannah, I sent some edits your way in a PM so I could avoid quoting.
