Which of the two looks best:
1) As a professional basketball player, my father traveled the United States with my family joining during vacations.
2) As a professional basketball player, my father traveled the United States, with my family joining during vacations.
to comma or not to comma
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Seoulless wrote:Which of the two looks best:
1) As a professional basketball player, my father traveled the United States with my family joining during vacations.
2) As a professional basketball player, my father traveled the United States, with my family joining during vacations.
2. He's not traveling with his family
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These are both confusing. Make it two sentences. Something like this:
As a professional basketball player, my father traveled the United States. During vacations, my family would join him on the road.
As a professional basketball player, my father traveled the United States. During vacations, my family would join him on the road.
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I agree with the poster above. Both of your options are a bit more confusing than they need to be, and splitting it up makes more sense.
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As a professional basketball player, my father traveled the United States, with my family joining during vacations -->
My father traveled the United States as a professional basketball with my family joining him during vacations.
My father traveled the United States as a professional basketball with my family joining him during vacations.
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jn7 wrote:As a professional basketball player, my father traveled the United States, with my family joining during vacations -->
My father traveled the United States as a professional basketball with my family joining him during vacations.
The second one is a MUCH more interesting story

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politics89 wrote:jn7 wrote:As a professional basketball player, my father traveled the United States, with my family joining during vacations -->
My father traveled the United States as a professional basketball with my family joining him during vacations.
The second one is a MUCH more interesting story

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politics89 wrote:jn7 wrote:As a professional basketball player, my father traveled the United States, with my family joining during vacations -->
My father traveled the United States as a professional basketball with my family joining him during vacations.
The second one is a MUCH more interesting story
Haha!! I didn't even realize I put that though I'm sure OP being an applicant to law school is smart enough not to copy and paste. That's good stuff
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I have nothing to contribute--only that I laughed so much, I almost went insane.
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xylocarp wrote:politics89 wrote:jn7 wrote:As a professional basketball player, my father traveled the United States, with my family joining during vacations -->
My father traveled the United States as a professional basketball with my family joining him during vacations.
The second one is a MUCH more interesting story
Jesus. This made the entire admissions cycle worth it for me! Funniest thing I've seen in a while. Thanks TLS!
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Seoulless wrote:xylocarp wrote:politics89 wrote:jn7 wrote:As a professional basketball player, my father traveled the United States, with my family joining during vacations -->
My father traveled the United States as a professional basketball with my family joining him during vacations.
The second one is a MUCH more interesting story
Jesus. This made the entire admissions cycle worth it for me! Funniest thing I've seen in a while. Thanks TLS!
Happy to be of service

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Re: to comma or not to comma
jn7 wrote:My father traveled the United States as a professional basketball with my family joining him during vacations.
This.
Also, #1 is poorly written and #2 does not use commas correctly.
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jn7 wrote:As a professional basketball player, my father traveled the United States, with my family joining during vacations -->
My father traveled the United States as a professional basketball with my family joining him during vacations.
URM to the max

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