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palbatron
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Postby palbatron » Mon Dec 30, 2013 1:50 pm

Delete.
Last edited by palbatron on Tue Dec 31, 2013 12:19 am, edited 2 times in total.

palbatron
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Re: Final draft of PS

Postby palbatron » Mon Dec 30, 2013 2:44 pm

Also, two questions:

Do I need a title?

Is there anything I need to put as a heading such as my name, etc.?

Thank you again.

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lastsamurai
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Re: Final draft of PS

Postby lastsamurai » Mon Dec 30, 2013 5:46 pm

I think it's a very safe and expected PS, but I'm sure you know that writing all about your philosophy major isn't exactly revolutionary in the world of law school statements.

Anyway, I think you just need to edit a bit more to make sure you're coming across positively. For instance, I wouldn't say that you just did philosophy as a means to an end. Even if true, that doesn't mean you need to come right out and say it. Also, please don't say that you "crushed" your debate. This isn't a text message to your bffl - it's a law school personal statement.

Finally, the following sentence was particularly off-putting: My particular skillset indubitably has prepared me to execute these tasks effectively.

Don't come out and say this...show it through examples where you employed your skills.

Obviously my advice is just my 0L opinion, so take it with a grain of salt. Good luck!

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Re: Final draft of PS

Postby palbatron » Mon Dec 30, 2013 6:33 pm

Thanks a lot, I appreciate it. Removed the "crushed it", completely agree with you. I also removed "indubitably", because I think that statement still works without it due to the examples listed in the body. Thanks again, and good luck to you as well.

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Re: Delete

Postby lastsamurai » Tue Dec 31, 2013 10:58 am

Sure thing - and the credited response to the title is not to include one. Just add a header that says "Your Name - Personal Statement L12345678"




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