GPA Addendum-- could someone please review for grammar.

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GPA Addendum-- could someone please review for grammar.

Postby Anonymous User » Tue Nov 19, 2013 8:32 pm

I began higher education in the fall of 2004. It wasn’t long before I realized I was not ready for the rigors of higher education. During that first semester I struggled to complete the assigned work. Anxious at the thought of letting my family down, I held onto the idea of completing my higher education even thought all signs where pointing to a lack of preparedness. I believe this fear of letting my family down and a lack of maturity, led to my holding on much longer than I should have. After two disastrous semesters I was placed on academic probation. The third semester, Fall 2005, went about as well as the previous two leading to a 2.48 cumulative GPA; at that point I decided I had had enough. Getting an education was important to me but I finally accepted the fact that at that time I was not ready. I took the following two semesters off. I decided to take the time to focus on what I saw as my major academic weaknesses, reading and writing
Having worked incessantly on improving my reading and writing skills for a year, and feeling much more comfortable academically, I enrolled at the local community college for the Spring 2007 semester. I was able to achieve a 3.22 GPA that semester. This gave me the confidence to go back to _________ the following semester, the whole time continuing to work on improving my English reading and writing skills. My first semester back at ________I received a 3.42 GPA. As my confidence grew and my language skills continued to increase I transferred to the _______. My first semester there I was able to achieve a 3.73 GPA and five semesters left with a 3.76 Cumulative GPA.
When I began higher education, I was not prepared academically for the rigors I would face. Furthermore, I was not mature enough to accept this reality at the time and as a result it took me three semesters to come to terms with it. After I accepted the fact that I was not ready, I left my undergraduate institution and worked tirelessly on shoring up my academic weaknesses. Even though this is not an ideal way for anyone to complete higher education, I feel that I am stronger because of the experience.

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Re: GPA Addendum-- could someone please review for grammar.

Postby neprep » Thu Nov 21, 2013 9:14 am

Anonymous User wrote:I began higher education college in the fall of 2004. It wasn’t long before I realized I was not ready for the rigors of higher education: During that first semester, I struggled to complete the assigned work. Anxious at the thought of letting my family down, I held onto the idea of completing my higher education even thought though all signs where were pointing to a my lack of preparedness. I believe this fear of letting my family down, combined with and a lack of academic maturity, led to my holding on much longer than I should have. After two disastrous semesters, I was placed on academic probation. The third semester, Fall 2005, went about as well as the previous two leading to a 2.48 cumulative GPA; at that point I decided I had had enough. Getting an education was important to me but I finally accepted the fact that at that time I was not ready. I took the following two semesters off from school, and decided to take the that time to focus on what I saw as my major academic weaknesses: reading and writing.

Having worked incessantly (Rethink the word choice. "Incessant" is usually said of things regarded as unpleasant) on improving my reading and writing skills for a year, and feeling much more comfortable academically, I enrolled at the local community college for the Spring 2007 semester. I was able to achieve a 3.22 GPA that semester. This gave me the confidence to go back to _________ the following semester, the whole time continuing to work on improving my English reading and writing skills. My first semester back at ________I received a 3.42 GPA. As my confidence grew and my language skills continued to increase [color=#FF0000]improve,[/color] I transferred to the _______. My first semester there, I was able to achieve a 3.73 GPA and five semesters left with a 3.76 Cumulative GPA (I don't understand what this last clause means.).

When I began higher education, I was not prepared academically for the rigors I would face. Furthermore, I was not mature enough to accept this reality at the time and as a result it took me three semesters to come to terms with it. After I accepted the fact that I was not ready, I left my undergraduate institution and worked tirelessly on shoring up my academic weaknesses. (No need to provide a summary of what you've just said.) Even though this is not an ideal way for anyone to complete higher education, I feel that I am stronger because of the experience.




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