First draft of my PS!! Be brutally honest.

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First draft of my PS!! Be brutally honest.

Postby Anonymous User » Thu Oct 24, 2013 8:07 pm

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Re: First draft of my PS!! Be brutally honest.

Postby Anonymous User » Fri Oct 25, 2013 1:03 am

Any comments would be greatly appreciated!!! :D

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Re: First draft of my PS!! Be brutally honest.

Postby Anonymous User » Sat Oct 26, 2013 12:46 am

Anybody??

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Re: First draft of my PS!! Be brutally honest.

Postby AnonymousAlterEgoC » Sat Oct 26, 2013 12:04 pm

What I learn:

you want to be a lawyer
you can empathize

What I do not learn:

why you would be a strong candidate for law school

I would change:

show me why you would be a strong candidate for law school.

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Re: First draft of my PS!! Be brutally honest.

Postby sparty99 » Sat Oct 26, 2013 12:29 pm

Not very compelling. You use one example that shows why you want to be a lawyer. I receive no other insight about your life experiences. You answer, "Why Law?" But you don't allow the reader to see why we should accept you? Your statement does not contain any achievements, does not show how you overcame an obstacle, how your work experience might be better then others, how your background could contribute to the practice of law or the classroom. It needs more meat.

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Re: First draft of my PS!! Be brutally honest.

Postby Anonymous User » Sat Oct 26, 2013 5:13 pm

Yeah I see what you're saying, I'll work on making it more compelling, thanks for the comments!




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