how is this start?

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how is this start?

Postby Anonymous User » Wed Oct 09, 2013 11:18 pm

I’m a skeptic. It’s almost like I have a radar that detects fraud. I’m also very curious. I try to explore as much as I possibly can about this world as long as I am still breathing. These two characteristics combined have allowed me to have one of the most interesting experiences of my life. I was working a late shift at a retail store one evening when I was approached by a tall and well-groomed man in a suit. The man asked, “how much is this store paying you”? I didn’t respond. The man gave me information about a company that he works for who is hiring part-time college students like myself. He said that he was a hiring manager and they offered to pay double the amount that I made at my job. Immediately, my doubts kicked in.
I knew in the back of my mind that something like this was sketchy. As my skepticism went into drive, so did my curiosity. I decided to see what this was all about. We exchanged phone numbers and I was scheduled for an interview for the next week. I became inquisitive and this job and how this company worked. I did some research online to find out that this was indeed a pyramid scheme.


I am trying to lead this into how I saw people getting caught into scams and as an attorney i would like to try to help people like this

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lastsamurai
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Re: how is this start?

Postby lastsamurai » Thu Oct 10, 2013 12:00 am

I would head a different direction personally. Sounds a bit like something I'd hear on the 5 o' clock news team's investigative report...

If you're committed to this story line, make sure you show how you do something rather than telling.

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Re: how is this start?

Postby midwest17 » Sat Oct 12, 2013 11:25 am

Are you the same person who posted this thread? viewtopic.php?f=18&t=217998

If so, I'd recommend not fabricating your story. The similarities between the two suggest they're the same story, but I don't see how the details are reconcilable.




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