Please critique my character & fitness addendum?!

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Please critique my character & fitness addendum?!

Postby Anonymous User » Tue Dec 11, 2012 2:52 am

Thank you sooo much in advance!
And I'm sorry I cheated... I won't cheat again :(


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On May 18, 2010, I violated ______ University's Code of Academic Integrity by cheating on the final exam for _______ (ABC 2050) class. A few hours before the exam, I experienced extremely severe anxiety and a panic attack. Then, I made one of the worst decisions of my college career: to cheat on my exam.

I was caught by my professor and immediately pleaded guilty. At the time, I was already attending counseling sessions for my academic anxiety, and my professor was understanding of my circumstances. Fortunately, I was given a grade punishment for the exam only.

On December 10, 2010, I was diagnosed with Generalized Anxiety Disorder. I have subsequently received treatment from the university health services, and have been able to control my anxiety under pressure, academic or non-academic. The incident mentioned above was my first and only violation of the Code, and I remained in good standing until graduation.

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Lincoln
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Re: Please critique my character & fitness addendum?!

Postby Lincoln » Tue Dec 11, 2012 2:57 am

Anonymous User wrote:Thank you sooo much in advance!
And I'm sorry I cheated... I won't cheat again :(


:arrow:
On May 18, 2010, I violated ______ University's Code of Academic Integrity by cheating on the final exam for _______ (ABC 2050) class. A few hours before the exam, I experienced extremely severe anxiety and a panic attack. Then, I made one of the worst decisions of my college career: to cheat on my exam.

I was caught bymy professor caught me, and I immediately pleaded guilty. At the time, I was already attending counseling sessions for my academic anxiety, and my professor was understanding of my circumstances. Fortunately As a result, I was only given a grade punishment for the examonly.

On December 10, 2010, I was diagnosed with Generalized Anxiety Disorder. I have subsequently received treatment from the university health services, and have been able to control my anxiety under academic and non-academic pressure alike, academic or non-academic. The incident mentioned above was my first and only violation of the Code, and I remained in good standing until graduation.

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bluepenguin
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Re: Please critique my character & fitness addendum?!

Postby bluepenguin » Tue Dec 11, 2012 2:58 am

Rearrange it. The way you have it written now puts an excuse first and the accountability second. I would suggest you put the accountability immediately after the offense, and explain the circumstances in a second paragraph.

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Re: Please critique my character & fitness addendum?!

Postby Anonymous User » Tue Dec 11, 2012 2:33 pm

you guys are awesome! anyone else?? :o




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