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Re: Please critique this introductory paragraph

Post by CanadianWolf » Sun Nov 04, 2012 6:02 pm

At first glance, it appears to be a bit too short.

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Re: Please critique this introductory paragraph

Post by CanadianWolf » Sun Nov 04, 2012 6:04 pm

To be blunt, I believe that most, maybe all, US law schools require one's PS to be written in English.

If you are a thesaurus salesman, this is an excellent piece, but if you want to be a practicing lawyer, then you need to be able to communicate your thoughts in a more clear fashion.
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Re: Please critique this introductory paragraph

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Re: Please critique this introductory paragraph

Post by Anonymous User » Sun Nov 04, 2012 6:10 pm

CanadianWolf wrote:To be blunt, I believe that most, maybe all, US law schools require one's PS to be written in English.

If you are a thesaurus salesman, this is an excellent piece, but if you want to be a practicing lawyer, then you need to be able to communicate your thoughts in a more clear fashion.
That wasn't very blunt.

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Re: Please critique this introductory paragraph

Post by CanadianWolf » Sun Nov 04, 2012 6:12 pm

Okay. Then: To be tactful, ....

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