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albanach
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Re: PS on Sex

Postby albanach » Thu Oct 25, 2012 10:37 am

skri65 wrote:
No, it wasn't that your other critique wasn't nice (I can handle it)..just didn't understand exactly what you were suggesting. I get what you're saying. I want to focus on IP and my science background because I think it separates me from other applicants. With that said, I absolutely agree that this personal statement isn't the most exciting. On the other hand, I'm not quite sure how I can focus on IP/science background without boring the AdComm.


Your resume and transcripts should show your IP/Science background.

Have you read the PS section in the Ivey guide? I found it helpful.

skri65
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Re: PS on Sex

Postby skri65 » Thu Oct 25, 2012 12:37 pm

albanach wrote:
skri65 wrote:
No, it wasn't that your other critique wasn't nice (I can handle it)..just didn't understand exactly what you were suggesting. I get what you're saying. I want to focus on IP and my science background because I think it separates me from other applicants. With that said, I absolutely agree that this personal statement isn't the most exciting. On the other hand, I'm not quite sure how I can focus on IP/science background without boring the AdComm.


Your resume and transcripts should show your IP/Science background.

Have you read the PS section in the Ivey guide? I found it helpful.


Thanks for your advice. I appreciate it. I did want to focus the PS on my science, despite the fact that it is on my resume, as I feel that it can be one of the unique things I bring to the law school and deserves some emphasis. I figure you are right, though.

Anyone else think I should scrap it and focus on something else? Or does this have potential.

albanach
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Re: PS on Sex

Postby albanach » Thu Oct 25, 2012 2:24 pm

skri65 wrote:
albanach wrote:
skri65 wrote:
No, it wasn't that your other critique wasn't nice (I can handle it)..just didn't understand exactly what you were suggesting. I get what you're saying. I want to focus on IP and my science background because I think it separates me from other applicants. With that said, I absolutely agree that this personal statement isn't the most exciting. On the other hand, I'm not quite sure how I can focus on IP/science background without boring the AdComm.


Your resume and transcripts should show your IP/Science background.

Have you read the PS section in the Ivey guide? I found it helpful.


Thanks for your advice. I appreciate it. I did want to focus the PS on my science, despite the fact that it is on my resume, as I feel that it can be one of the unique things I bring to the law school and deserves some emphasis. I figure you are right, though.

Anyone else think I should scrap it and focus on something else? Or does this have potential.


You could still focus on science. I'd just look for it to be more narrow, more focused and more engaging. If I were reading it, I would want to come away interested in you, not fearful that you're a socially reclusive geek.

I think you can still write something that's techy. However, it needs to speak about you, not about some current legal issue.

Here's the number one bad personal essay topic from Anna Ivey...

"Bad Personal Topic #1: Why You Want a Law Degree If admissions officers wanted to know why you’re pursuing a law degree, they’d ask you that expressly"

skri65
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Re: PS on Sex

Postby skri65 » Thu Oct 25, 2012 3:21 pm

albanach wrote:
skri65 wrote:
albanach wrote:
skri65 wrote:
No, it wasn't that your other critique wasn't nice (I can handle it)..just didn't understand exactly what you were suggesting. I get what you're saying. I want to focus on IP and my science background because I think it separates me from other applicants. With that said, I absolutely agree that this personal statement isn't the most exciting. On the other hand, I'm not quite sure how I can focus on IP/science background without boring the AdComm.


Your resume and transcripts should show your IP/Science background.

Have you read the PS section in the Ivey guide? I found it helpful.


Thanks for your advice. I appreciate it. I did want to focus the PS on my science, despite the fact that it is on my resume, as I feel that it can be one of the unique things I bring to the law school and deserves some emphasis. I figure you are right, though.

Anyone else think I should scrap it and focus on something else? Or does this have potential.



You could still focus on science. I'd just look for it to be more narrow, more focused and more engaging. If I were reading it, I would want to come away interested in you, not fearful that you're a socially reclusive geek.

I think you can still write something that's techy. However, it needs to speak about you, not about some current legal issue.

Here's the number one bad personal essay topic from Anna Ivey...

"Bad Personal Topic #1: Why You Want a Law Degree If admissions officers wanted to know why you’re pursuing a law degree, they’d ask you that expressly"



Thanks for the suggestions. I will be brainstorming for more concrete experiences or more engaging ideas. In the mean time, I'm still welcoming any other peoples suggestions or analysis on this essay and its acceptability as a law school submission. There are some mixed reviews here.




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